VC: Haiku - Sketches II

During this round of the project, we continued to move forwards iterating and refining our symbols. The biggest issue that Jamie noticed in my line "where can I pour you?..." was that my symbols didn't convey the idea of "where." It was definitely a valid point because the questioning notion of the line is probably most important. Another problem Jamie noticed was that my symbols for "insects singing in the grass" were similar to Patrick's, which is understandable since we both are working with the same poem, but she encouraged me to try something different.

Dirty Bath water
where can I pour you?… insects
singing in the grass
-Onitsura